HI CAM

2014-11-19 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Hi Cam I wrote to today's script Would u collect to my script? I have a lot of friends. But I have to chose closest friends . I have two closest friends. They's name is eunsun and ji yun. I met eun sun when we were both middle school. We were classmate for three year. And we went to same high school. At that time eun sun and me met ji yun. For a high school we were same class . that’s why we were closeset friends. We know each other so much. Like a ex-boyfriends or co-workers and their family.. nowdays we live in different cities. But we keep in touch with kakaotalk and calling.

강사 첨삭

Hi there my dear [이름], goodafternoon!
I was impressed with your composition very good job!
You were able to share your story about the said topic and two thumbs up for that.

Your friends are indeed very lucky to have you...:)

I can\'t wait to hear your voice again...

Take care and have a great day...

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Hi Cam
I wrote to today\'s script Would u collect to my script?
>>I wrote today\'s composition, would you correct/modify my script?
I have a lot of friends.

>>correct

OT: I have lots of friend.

But I have to chose closest friends .

>>But I have to choose my closest friends.

I have two closest friends.

>>I have to close friends.

They\'s name is eunsun and ji yun.

>>Their names are Eunsun and Ji yun.

I met eun sun when we were both middle school.

>>I met Eun sun when we were both in middle school.

We were classmate for three year.

>>We were classmates for three years.

And we went to same high school.

>>And we went to the same high school.

At that time eun sun and me met ji yun.

>>At that time Eun sun and I met Ji yun.
 For a high school we were same class .

>>All of us 3 were in the same high school.

that’s why we were closeset friends.

>>That is why we were the best of friends.

We know each other so much.

>>correct

Like a ex-boyfriends or co-workers and their family..

>>correct

nowdays we live in different cities.

>>correct (Nowadays)
 But we keep in touch with kakaotalk and calling.

>>But we keep in touch using kakaotalk and by calling each other.

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