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I'm going to write about the most impressive movie I've seen.
The name is "My name is [Name]."
This is india film and indian act in the movie.
Actor is a disable person but smart and pure.
Actress likes his pureness.
They married and feel happy in America.
One day, It happened 9.11 terror.
They have took discrimination since then.
His son was killed by American childrens.
She was sad and told him "It is because you are a Muslim. Get out! when you tell America president "my name is kan,I'm not a terrorist", you might come back to me."
So, he tried to meet America president.
He met America president and told him "My name is [Name]. I'm not a terrorist" after he experienced many ups and downs.
I'm sorry to damage that is caused by religious war.
And It is very impressive movie.
강사 첨삭
Hi Miss [이름]! I am happy to talk with you every day. You have improved a lot. I think I have to watch that movie too. It seems exciting and inspirational. Thanks for always being cooperative in class.
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I'm going to write about the most impressive movie I've seen.
>> correctThe name is "My name is [Name]."
>> or: It뭩 entitled
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