Hi, Dianne!!

2018-11-28 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree? I don\'t agree that government or voluntary organization give them money. They need money to live. But when they get some money, they would buy liquor. Of couse not all of them but many of them. So I think that government should support places to sleep and meal to eat instead of money. Today\'s composition was written under the assumption that I am an English teacher. Of course it came from my expierience. To what extent do you agree with my composition? If in this page are incorrect spellings, please check and correct just the incorrect word. If you write all sentence, it is little bit difficult for me to find the wrong word in long sentence. Have a nice day and see you thusday. PS: I am so sorry you can not see my hansome face in the class.kk

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

I\'m glad that you could express your opinions about the topic.
Well, I do agree with you. We should not spoil them by giving money.
They will be dependent on us and become lazy to work.
Maybe it\'s good to give money at first, but the next time, it would be better to give them food or goods.
See you on Thursday!

_Teacher Dianne

Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?
>> correct
I don\'t agree that government or voluntary organization give them money.
>> I don\'t agree that the government or voluntary organizations should give them money. (We need to stress the word \"government\" ere.)
They need money to live. But when they get some money, they would buy liquor.
>> correct
Of course not all of them but many of them.
>> course (grammatically correct)
So I think that government should support places to sleep and meal to eat instead of money.
>> So I think that the government should support them with places to sleep and meal to eat instead of money.
Today\'s composition was written under the assumption that I am an English teacher.
>> correct
Of course it came from my expierience.
>> experience (grammatically correct)
To what extent do you agree with my composition?
>> experience (I totally agree with your composition. ^^)
If in this page are incorrect spellings, please check and correct just the incorrect word.
>> If there are misspelled words on this page, please check and correct just the incorrect word or words.
If you write all sentence, it is little bit difficult for me to find the wrong word in long sentence.
>> If you write all the sentence, it is a little bit difficult for me to find the wrong word, especially in a long sentence.
Have a nice day and see you thusday.
>> Have a nice day and see you on Thursday.
PS: I am so sorry you can not see my hansome face in the class.kk
>> PS: I am so sorry that you couldn’t see my handsome face in the class. kk (haha Yes, I was unfortunate.)

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