Hi, Elisha!

Hi Seung Ho! I appreciate your efforts very much. Also, thank you for your compliment! Your grammar is surely getting better. Congratulations! ^^

Here are the words and expressions you may try to use on your next composition: contemplate and prosper ; put my shoulder on the wheel. I\'m looking forward to our next class. See you! ~ T. Elisha

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I have a daughter whose name is Dahyun.

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She is 15 years old and so cute until now.

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 She is very optimistic and cheerful.

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I like her laughter that is so loud.

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And her fashion is little boyish because she sometimes wears her elder brother\'s clothes.

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In the exam period, my daughter have never gotten stress.

>> In the exam period, my daughter has never gotten stressed.

- She is always followed by has.

She was rather in a good mood.

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One day, I have asked her why she was in a good mood in the exam period unlike others. \"Dahyun, Every student gets stressed during school test unlike you.\"

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 She said, \"dad! why do I have to get stress? I have planed to do many joyful things with my friends After exam period. So nowadays I am happy.

>>  She said, \"Dad! why do I have to get stressed? I have planned to do many joyful things with my friends after the exam period. So nowadays I am happy.\"

- \"Get stressed\" is a phrase we use when we are worried about something.

After I listened to her answer, I thought that she received good personality from God.

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Elisha! I think that you can guess her school record.

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She isn\'t good at studying, She is gifted with the talent of singing and she got it from her mom.

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she is also adept at dancing.

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 one day, I beguiled her to be a singer.

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she hesitated for a while but soon she said \'yes I would be a star\'

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Last month she failed the entrance examination of art highschool.

>> Last month she failed the entrance examination of an art high school.

- High and school is written separately.
 The school evaluated the applicants by 50% school grade and 50% practical skill.

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 I frankly anticipated that it is so difficult for her to get certificate because of her school grade.

>>  I frankly anticipated that it will be so difficult for her to get a certificate because of her school grades.

- We will use \'will\' her because we are talking about something that could happen in the future.

So I worried that she would be disappointed and depressed for a long time.

>> So, I got worried that she would be disappointed and depressed for a long time.

- \'Got worried\' is a phrase we use when we re trying to express our anxiety or uncertainty about something.

Because she eagerly wants to go the school and practiced very hard.

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 But when she knew her failure, she took a nap for 3hours and after the nap, asked me to buy a fried chicken and enjoyed it casually.

>>  When she heard about her failure, she took a nap for 3hours and after taking a nap, asked me to buy fried chicken and enjoyed it casually.

That\'s it.
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She is still expecting herself to become a famous singer so she would challenge to the auditions when she become a second grade of high school.

>> She is still expecting herself to become a famous singer so she would challenge herself to audition when she becomes a second year high school student.

- Subject-verb agreement. In this sentence, She and becomes.

in the future, even though she would fail to be a famous singer or star, she want to work at the field of music.

>> In the future, even though she would fail to be a famous singer or star, she wants to work at the field of music.

- Subject-verb agreement. In this sentence, She and wants. 
 I don\'t know she would be a star but certainly she is already and always the apple of my eyes.

>>  I don\'t know whether she would be a star or not but certainly, she is already and always  will be the apple of my eyes.  

- You are talking about a probability, so we use the conjunction \'whether\' in this sentence.