Hi Ella

I heard that Korea football team lost yesterday. As soon as I got my office, I read web news. I saw the title "Japan pounds Korea 3-0". According to news, Since Korea lost to Japan 4-1 in Sept. 28, 1974 in Tokyo it is for the first time for Korea to allow three goals deficit. I thought cause of the defeat is played away without star players like Lee Chung-young, Park Ji-Sung. I believe Our team will win at next game. I hope so.

Good day Mr. [이름]! That's bad news for your team. I do hope that Korea wins on their next game. Great job on your composition Mr. [이름]! Study the corrections I've made for your improvement. Good luck to team Korea! :D

 

I heard that Korea football team lost yesterday.
>>Correct!
As soon as I got my office, I read web news.
>>As soon as I got to my office, I read the web news.
I saw the title "Japan pounds Korea 3-0".
>>Correct!
According to news, Since Korea lost to Japan 4-1 in Sept. 28, 1974 in Tokyo it is for the first time for Korea to allow three goals deficit.
>>According to the news, Korea lost to Japan by 1-4 last September 28, 1974 in Tokyo. It is the first time that Korea lost by three goals.
I thought cause of the defeat is played away without star players like Lee Chung-young, Park Ji-Sung.
>>I thought the cause of the defeat is that the star players like Lee Chung Young and Park Ji Sung were unable to play.
I believe Our team will win at next game.
>>I believe our team will win the next game.
I hope so.
>>Correct!