Hi Ella
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the weather is now becoming cooler.
I love this time of the year which summer going into fall.
Anyway I stayed at my home last weekends most of all except I sometimes went to outside to ride bicycle with my children at the night.
On Sunday, I planned to make the cream spaghetti for my family.
So I went to the market nearby my home and I bought a milk, a spaghetti, three mushroom, a whipping cream and I came back my home.
I boiled the water and I roasted the vegetable, the shrimp and I put the spaghetti into the water.
At last I mixed the vegetable, the milk, the whipping cream and spaghetti. Finally I finished my cooking.
We had the cream spaghetti on lunch.
Actually, I thought my cream spaghetti is not the delicious dish^^.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mr [이름].
I'm glad to hear that you are finally happy about the weather. By the way, you made me hungry when you mentioned your cream spaghetti so I had spaghetti for dinner tonight.hahaha.
See you later.
I think the weather is now becoming cooler.
>>CORRECT^^I love this time of the year which summer going into fall.
>>I love this time of the year where summer is going into fall.Anyway I stayed at my home last weekends most of all except I sometimes went to outside to ride bicycle with my children at the night.
>>Anyway, I stayed at my home almost all weekend except for the times when I went outside to ride the bicycle with my children at night.On Sunday, I planned to make the cream spaghetti for my family.
>>CORRECT^^So I went to the market nearby my home and I bought a milk, a spaghetti, three mushroom, a whipping cream and I came back my home.>>So I went to the market nearby my home and bought milk, spaghetti pasta, three mushrooms, and whipped cream. Then I came back home.I boiled the water and I roasted the vegetable, the shrimp and I put the spaghetti into the water.
>>I boiled water and roasted the vegetables and shrimps. Then I put the pasta into the water.At last I mixed the vegetable, the milk, the whipping cream and spaghetti.
>>At last, I mixed the vegetables, milk, whipped cream, and the pasta.
Finally I finished my cooking.
>>Finally, I finished cooking.We had the cream spaghetti on lunch.
>>We had the cream spaghetti for lunch.Actually, I thought my cream spaghetti is not the delicious dish^^.
>>Actually, I thought my cream spaghetti is not a delicious dish.>>Honestly, I thought my cream spaghetti is not delicious.
***Aww, don't say that Mr. [이름]. I think anything cooked with LOVE is delicious.hehehe :)
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