Hi Ella

2011-08-22 · 첨삭 강사 Ella

학생이 쓴 원문

I think the weather is now becoming cooler. I love this time of the year which summer going into fall. Anyway I stayed at my home last weekends most of all except I sometimes went to outside to ride bicycle with my children at the night. On Sunday, I planned to make the cream spaghetti for my family. So I went to the market nearby my home and I bought a milk, a spaghetti, three mushroom, a whipping cream and I came back my home. I boiled the water and I roasted the vegetable, the shrimp and I put the spaghetti into the water. At last I mixed the vegetable, the milk, the whipping cream and spaghetti. Finally I finished my cooking. We had the cream spaghetti on lunch. Actually, I thought my cream spaghetti is not the delicious dish^^.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Mr [이름]. I'm glad to hear that you are finally happy about the weather. By the way, you made me hungry when you mentioned your cream spaghetti so I had spaghetti for dinner tonight.hahaha. See you later. I think the weather is now becoming cooler. >>CORRECT^^I love this time of the year which summer going into fall. >>I love this time of the year where summer is going into fall.Anyway I stayed at my home last weekends most of all except I sometimes went to outside to ride bicycle with my children at the night. >>Anyway, I stayed at my home almost all weekend except for the times when I went outside to ride the bicycle with my children at night.On Sunday, I planned to make the cream spaghetti for my family. >>CORRECT^^So I went to the market nearby my home and I bought a milk, a spaghetti, three mushroom, a whipping cream and I came back my home.>>So I went to the market nearby my home and bought milk, spaghetti pasta, three mushrooms, and whipped cream. Then I came back home.I boiled the water and I roasted the vegetable, the shrimp and I put the spaghetti into the water. >>I boiled water and roasted the vegetables and shrimps. Then I put the pasta into the water.At last I mixed the vegetable, the milk, the whipping cream and spaghetti. >>At last, I mixed the vegetables, milk, whipped cream, and the pasta. Finally I finished my cooking. >>Finally, I finished cooking.We had the cream spaghetti on lunch. >>We had the cream spaghetti for lunch.Actually, I thought my cream spaghetti is not the delicious dish^^. >>Actually, I thought my cream spaghetti is not a delicious dish.>>Honestly, I thought my cream spaghetti is not delicious. ***Aww, don't say that Mr. [이름]. I think anything cooked with LOVE is delicious.hehehe :)

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