Hi, Gabby.
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I\'m a [이름]derer to try to find my way of a future. I couldn\'t find what job i have to be happy. So, I\'m trying to do various things. Few days ago, I passed a final interview that was highly competitive and totally different from my major.
I like playing computer games. That\'s because it\'s one of my few talent I found. And at the same time I dislike them, because I used to spend too much energy and time, Nowadays, I\'m busy to study English, I\'m managing my time well. Also, it\'s one of my few addiction.
I like playing ping pong. When I served in the military, It was my only joy. When I play ping pong, sometime I feel like I\'m a ball. I mean, When I concentrate on playing ping pong, it can make me forget everything. Also, I was third in my troop.
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Hi [이름] [이름]. Thanks for sharing a lot of things about you. :)
- T. Gabby
I\'m a [이름]derer to try to find my way of a future.
>> I am a [이름]derer of a better future for myself.
I couldn\'t find what job i have to be happy.
>> I couldn\'t find a job that will make me happy.
So, I\'m trying to do various things.
>> Correct.
Few days ago, I passed a final interview that was highly competitive and totally different from my major.
>> Correct.
I like playing computer games. That\'s because it\'s one of my few talent I found. >> I like playing computer games and I think that it\'s one of my talents.
And at the same time I dislike them, because I used to spend too much energy and time,
>> But at the same time, I dislike it because it consumes a lot of my time and energy.
Nowadays, I\'m busy to study English, I\'m managing my time well.
>> Nowadays, I\'ve been very busy studying English so I\'m managing my time well.
Also, it\'s one of my few addiction.
>> Also, it\'s one my addictions.
I like playing ping pong.
I like playing ping pong.
>> Correct.
When I served in the military, It was my only joy.
>> I found joy when I served in the military before.
When I play ping pong, sometime I feel like I\'m a ball.
>> Whenever I play ping pong, I sometimes feel that I\'m like a ball.
I mean, When I concentrate on playing ping pong, it can make me forget everything.
>> I mean when I\'m focued in playing ping poing, I forget everything.
Also, I was third in my troop.
>> Correct.
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