Hi, Gabby.
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What are your priorities in life?
I\'d say my top priorities in life are family and development. I always clear my schedule on weekends, because my parents visit me every weekend. And I do all house work for them not to care my house. I think the second important priority is development not about money. That\'s because I decided not to work in Economics. When I challenge to get a certificate about Certified Investment Manager for two months, I realized that development, such as researching and studying some academics I\'m really interested in, is more important priority for me than studying how much to earn. So, I sometimes invest in stocks as hobby. Also, that\'s because recently I gave up a good chance about a middle management when I passed a final interview. And my other priorities in life are health and friendship. Nowadays, I keep my health by a little running. I [이름]t to work out more, but I can\'t because of my injured arm. I keep in touch with my friends at least once at a month.
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Hi [이름] [이름]. Good job for this composition. Impressive!
- T. Gabby :)
I\'d say my top priorities in life are family and development.
>> Correct.
I always clear my schedule on weekends, because my parents visit me every weekend.
>> Correct.
And I do all house work for them not to care my house.
>> And I do all the household chores for them.
I think the second important priority is development not about money.
>> I think that the second important priority is my development not just about money.
That\'s because I decided not to work in Economics.
>> Correct.
When I challenge to get a certificate about Certified Investment Manager for two months,
>> When I took the certificate on Investment Manager for two months,
I realized that development,
>> Correct
such as researching and studying some academics I\'m really interested in, is more important priority for me than studying how much to earn.
>> such as researching and studying some academics I\'m really interested in, are important priorities rather than just thinking about how much will I earn.
So, I sometimes invest in stocks as hobby.
>> So, I sometimes invest in stocks as part of my hobby.
Also, that\'s because recently I gave up a good chance about a middle management when I passed a final interview.
>> Correct.
And my other priorities in life are health and friendship.
>> Correct.
Nowadays, I keep my health by a little running.
>> Nowadays, I keep my body healthy by running.
I [이름]t to work out more, but I can\'t because of my injured arm.
>> Correct.
I keep in touch with my friends at least once at a month.
>> I keep in touch with my friends at least once a month.
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