Hi Gemmar

2022-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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ESSAY: Overpopulation is the world\'s most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? I think Teacher Gemmar is interested in the subject of relations with popuration. Aren\'t you? hihihihi It is very reasonable that overpopulation is the world\'s serious environmental problem but I don\'t agree that overpopulation is the most serious environmental problem. There are many kinds of destroying environmental problem such as overuseing electric service and plastic goods, wasting of food, emitting carbon gas and so on.

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Hi Ms. [이름]~! ^^ It\'s always great to talk to you in both spoken and written English hahaha. Anyway, I know you are seriously preparing for your trip to Saipan so keep it up!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I think Teacher Gemmar is interested in the subject of relations with popuration. Aren\'t you? hihihihi
>>> I think you are interested in the subject related with population. Aren\'t you? ( I\'m so much into world\'s issues I guess hahahaha)
It is very reasonable that overpopulation is the world\'s serious environmental problem but I don\'t agree that overpopulation is the most serious environmental problem.

>>> CORRECT
There are many kinds of destroying environmental problem such as overuseing electric service and plastic goods, wasting of food, emitting carbon gas and so on.

>>> There are many factors affecting the environment such as overusing electric service and plastic goods, wasting of food, emitting carbon gas and so on.

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