Hi Gemmar

2022-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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ESSAY: Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it\\\'s bad for them. Why? What are the most effective ways to improve people\\\'s eating habits? Unhealthy food is usually good taste to seduce people. When you start to eat the unhealthy and yummy food, you cannot stop eating it. It\'s like a strong addiction. The way that you stop eating unhealthy food, you might have not eaten the unhealthy food from the begginning. To have good eating habits, First of all, fill the refrigerator with divese vegetables and healthy foods. And go to home right away after work, and cook healthy dishes.

강사 첨삭

Good day Ms. [이름]! I agree! Unhealthy is yummy! hahaha But we have to take in moderation. Too much is bad. Hahaha!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Unhealthy food is usually good taste to seduce people.

>>> Unhealthy food usually have a good taste and could seduce people.
When you start to eat the unhealthy and yummy food, you cannot stop eating it.

>>> When you start to eat unhealthy and yummy food, you cannot stop eating it.
It\'s like a strong addiction.

>>> CORRECT
The way that you stop eating unhealthy food, you might have not eaten the unhealthy food from the beginning.

>>> The only way to stop eating unhealthy food, is not eating it in the first place.
To have good eating habits,
First of all, fill the refrigerator with divese vegetables and healthy foods.

>>> To have good eating habits, first of all, fill the refrigerator with diverse vegetables and healthy foods.
And go to home right away after work, and cook healthy dishes.

>>> Then, go home straight after work, and cook healthy dishes.

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