Hi Gemmar
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ESSAY: In other countries, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?
We have the place where there are nurses and doctors to look after the elderly In Korea.
All of Korean who make money have to pay every month medical insurance which payment inculdes prepration for when we get old.
With this insurance , all the elderly korean can use nursing program on small money.
Korea medical insurance system is famous for cheap and well organised system in the world.
But as people\'s life is getting longer, the nest generation have to pay more and longer than the elderly had paid.
Goverment already knows that the money will run out soon because of life extention, therefore medical insurance fee has been increaseing every year.
I don\'t complain because I will be also old. (SAD)
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
We have the place where there are nurses and doctors to look after the elderly In Korea. ( IS IT SILVER TOWN? )
>>> CORRECT
All of Korean who make money have to pay every month medical insurance which payment inculdes prepration for when we get old.
All of Korean who make money have to pay every month medical insurance which payment inculdes prepration for when we get old.
>>> Koreans have to make money to pay their monthly medical insurance which includes the preparation for senior life.
With this insurance , all the elderly korean can use nursing program on small money.
With this insurance , all the elderly korean can use nursing program on small money.
>>> With this insurance, the elderly Koreans can use the nursing program with small amount of money.
Korea medical insurance system is famous for cheap and well organized system in the world.
Korea medical insurance system is famous for cheap and well organized system in the world.
>>> CORRECT
But as people\'s life is getting longer, the nest generation have to pay more and longer than the elderly had paid.
>>> But as people\'s life expectancy is getting longer, the next generations have to pay more and longer than the elderly.
Goverment already knows that the money will run out soon because of life extention, therefore medical insurance fee has been increaseing every year.
Goverment already knows that the money will run out soon because of life extention, therefore medical insurance fee has been increaseing every year.
>>> The government already knows that the money will run out soon because of longer life expectancy, therefore the medical insurance fee has been increasing every year.
I don\'t complain because I will be also old. (SAD) ( IT\'S SOMETHING INEVITABLE THAT\'S WHY PEOPLE DO YOLO )
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