Hi Gemmar
학생이 쓴 원문
Gemma~~~
what happened to you?
Does it happen power outage again?
I appied 20 minutes class today TT
I am going to write delayed essay today.
ESSAY: People nowadays are not as fit and active as they were in the past. What are the reasons for this? What measures can be taken for this?
I think that nowadays people are fitter and more active than they were in the past.
As I know, most people do sports ast least one for their health.
Yoga, swimming, tennis, table tennis, golf, pilates, cycle, mountain climbing are popular sports in korea.
In the past, people were not able to spend time for their health because they were so busy to make money for a living.
But With developing science, people do not need to do what they did in the past.
For example.
With mobile phone, People don\'t go to library
With washing machine and AI vaccum cleaner, people can escape form house chore.
To make people fit and active
I will say that to lose your weight , move and do what machine do. hihihi
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [이름]! The power just got back! Haha! I\'m sorry for not having the class with you. I don\'t know but these days power interruption is becoming too rampant. I pay my bills on time so I don\'t like this to happen every time. But it\'s something out of my control. Huhuhu!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
As I know, most people do sports ast least one for their health.
>>>CORRECT
Yoga, swimming, tennis, table tennis, golf, Pilates, cycling, mountain climbing are popular sports in Korea.
Yoga, swimming, tennis, table tennis, golf, Pilates, cycling, mountain climbing are popular sports in Korea.
>>>CORRECT
In the past, people were not able to spend time for their health because they were so busy making money for living.
In the past, people were not able to spend time for their health because they were so busy making money for living.
>>>CORRECT
But with developing science, people do not need to do what they did in the past.
But with developing science, people do not need to do what they did in the past.
>>>CORRECT
For example.
With mobile phone, People don\'t go to library
For example.
With mobile phone, People don\'t go to library
>>> With mobile phones, people don\'t go to the library anymore.
With washing machine and AI vacuum cleaner, people can escape from doing house chores.
With washing machine and AI vacuum cleaner, people can escape from doing house chores.
>>>CORRECT
To make people fit and active I will say that to lose your weight , move and do what the machine does. hihihi
To make people fit and active I will say that to lose your weight , move and do what the machine does. hihihi
>>>CORRECT
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