Hi Gemmar

2022-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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ESSAY: The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree? I don\'t understand exactly what you ask. Do you want to ask me that women cannot calim gender equality even though the position of women has changed ? Definition of gender equality is very abstract to me. I think that man and women are very different creatures physically but they are same human being mentally. If I have a job demending power , I cannot get same postion with men because men is powerful than I am. However If I am a lawyer demending intelligence, I can be higher postion with men as long as I work hard. Do I understand correctly the topic ? hahaha You make me think over gender equality today. hahahha I sigh,,,,,,,, Because you have still 200 questions,,,,,,,,,,,,

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]! The question means women have the right to get a position in societies these days, compared to the past. However, gender equality is still an issue. Do you agree? Hahaha! Anyway, I think you answered it correctly. Good job! Keep writing! I hope the question didn\'t let your feelings get worse. Hihihihi!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
 I don\'t understand exactly what you ask.
>>> I don\'t exactly understand the question. 
Do you want to ask me that women cannot calim gender equality even though the position of women has changed ?
>>> Do you want to ask me that women cannot claim gender equality even though the position of women has changed? EXACTLY
Definition of gender equality is very abstract to me.
>>> The definition of gender equality is very abstract to me.
I think that man and women are very different creatures physically but they are same human being mentally.
>>> I think men and women are very different creatures physically but they are the same human beings. They are the same mentally.
If I have a job demending power , I cannot get same postion with men because men is powerful than I am.
>>> If I have a job which has demanding authority, I cannot get the same position with the men because men is more powerful than I am.
However If I am a lawyer demending intelligence, I can be higher postion with men as long as I work hard.
>>> 
However If I am a lawyer which demands intelligence, I can be in a higher position with men as long as I work hard.
Do I understand correctly the topic ? hahaha
>>> Do I understand the topic correctly ? hahaha
You make me think over gender equality today. hahahha
>>> CORRECT
I sigh,,,,,,,, Because you 
still have 200 questions,,,,,,,,,,,, >>> YES MS. [이름]! MORE TO COME!!! HAHAHA
>>> CORRECT 

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