Hi Gemmar

2022-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

Last Saturday, I went to a dog cafeteria with Nana and my husband. They sell beverage and some snacks and give a place which dogs can play. We have to pay dog\'s entrance fee and have to order drinks or some snacks. We visited a dog cafe long time ago just once. As I remembered, Nana didn\'t like playing with other dogs even worse she scared other dogs. But she really enjoyed this time. she played catching a ball with me and ate delicious pet food. But still She doesn\'t like other dogs. She ran away when other dogs came to her and tried to smell her. I think she thinks she is human like me. hihihihi I am going to go there again soon because Nana slept well that day with tiredness. hahhaha

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]! ^^ Honestly, I don\'t have anything to share as far as petting is concerned. Hahaha! The last time I took care of a dog was when I was in grade school. Since it was my first pet... and also the last actually... Hahaha! I was very excited to take care of Rio, the name of my dog. Every time I came home after school, I used to look for Rio and play with him. One afternoon, I was excited to go home and play with Rio. I was saddened when I couldn\'t find him at home. My mom saw me and told me that my dad and his friends killed and ate Rio. I was so upset that I didn\'t talk to my dad about a month. Hahaha! After which, I\'ve decided not to have pets anymore. ;( 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Last Saturday, I went to a dog cafeteria with Nana and my husband.
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They sell beverage and some snacks and give a place which dogs can play.
>>> They sell beverages and some snacks and provide a place where dogs can play.
We have to pay for the dog\'s entrance fee and have to order drinks or some snacks.
>>> CORRECT
We visited a dog cafe long time ago just once.
>>> CORRECT
As I remembered, Nana didn\'t like playing with other dogs even worse she scared other dogs.
But she really enjoyed this time. she played catching a ball with me and ate delicious pet food.
>>> CORRECT
But still she doesn\'t like other dogs.
>>> CORRECT
 She ran away when other dogs came to her and tried to smell her.
>>> CORRECT
I think she thinks she is human like me. hihihihi
>>> CORRECT
I am going to go there again soon because Nana slept well that day with tiredness. hahhaha
>>> CORRECT

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