Hi Grace
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I didn’t know why he counld’t move that properly; he was reluctant to tell me his personla things, even his name.
I just watched him in a little disacnce while he was execersing. After severl days, exactly his 7th day at the gym, he finally come to my office therefore we having a deep converstion.
I had no idea that he was self-conscious about his illness unitl he told the truth.
There was sorrow in his eyes, whcich made me decided to give a lot of helps to him.
He was very good people indeed and I put a lot of effort into making him healthy.
After a couple of months, he could to some extent get back on his feet
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Hi [이름]!
Wow! You really are a great person! You are so kind hearted to help such person. I hope that you get to help and inspire more people. Take care! ^_^
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>> Continuation of the previous storyI didn’t know why he counld’t move that properly; he was reluctant to tell me his personla things, even his name.
>> I don’t know why he couldn’t move his body properly. He was so reluctant. He couldn’t even tell me his name.I just watched him in a little disacnce while he was execersing.
>> I just watched him from a distance while he was exercising.
After severl days, exactly his 7th day at the gym, he finally come to my office therefore we having a deep converstion.
>> After seven days, he finally approached me and we had a deep conversation.I had no idea that he was self-conscious about his illness unitl he told the truth.
>> I had no idea that he was so conscious about his condition.There was sorrow in his eyes, whcich made me decided to give a lot of helps to him.
>> There was sorrow in his eyes and I got motivated in helping him.He was very good people indeed and I put a lot of effort into making him healthy.
>> He is a very good person and I am so willing to keep him healthy.After a couple of months, he could to some extent get back on his feet
>> After a couple of months, he can already do better activities and he got back on his feet.
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