Hi Grace

2010-12-06 · 첨삭 강사 Jenny

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continued on the previous story I didn’t know why he counld’t move that properly; he was reluctant to tell me his personla things, even his name. I just watched him in a little disacnce while he was execersing. After severl days, exactly his 7th day at the gym, he finally come to my office therefore we having a deep converstion. I had no idea that he was self-conscious about his illness unitl he told the truth. There was sorrow in his eyes, whcich made me decided to give a lot of helps to him. He was very good people indeed and I put a lot of effort into making him healthy. After a couple of months, he could to some extent get back on his feet

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Hi [이름]! Wow! You really are a great person! You are so kind hearted to help such person. I hope that you get to help and inspire more people. Take care! ^_^ continued on the previous story >> Continuation of the previous storyI didn’t know why he counld’t move that properly; he was reluctant to tell me his personla things, even his name. >> I don’t know why he couldn’t move his body properly. He was so reluctant. He couldn’t even tell me his name.I just watched him in a little disacnce while he was execersing. >> I just watched him from a distance while he was exercising.  After severl days, exactly his 7th day at the gym, he finally come to my office therefore we having a deep converstion. >> After seven days, he finally approached me and we had a deep conversation.I had no idea that he was self-conscious about his illness unitl he told the truth. >> I had no idea that he was so conscious about his condition.There was sorrow in his eyes, whcich made me decided to give a lot of helps to him. >> There was sorrow in his eyes and I got motivated in helping him.He was very good people indeed and I put a lot of effort into making him healthy. >> He is a very good person and I am so willing to keep him healthy.After a couple of months, he could to some extent get back on his feet >> After a couple of months, he can already do better activities and he got back on his feet.

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