Hi Grace

It's a start of another good week I hope you had a great weekend. To whom it may concern, I am applying for your university with all the documents that you need. Please, find the attached file. In additon, WHEN will I know the Admission Board's final decision? It is very imortant for me to know the result of the admission as soon as possible in order to get a students loan. I am looking forward hearing from you soon. Take care. I've been trying to contact you by e-mail several times, but no reply; I think there would be some problems with my computer while I was sending an e-mail. Therefore, I emamil againg with all the docuents that you said before.

Hi there, Thank you for your composition. You did great! Anyway, I just want to remind you about the use of WOULD in your sentence. Would is an auxiliary verb, a modal auxiliary verb. We use would mainly to: talk about the past talk about the future in the past express the conditional mood We also use would for other functions, such as: expressing desire, polite requests and questions, opinion or hope, wish and regret...     I hope this would help.  It's a start of another good week >>CorrectI hope you had a great weekend.>>CorrectTo whom it may concern,>>CorrectI am applying for your university with all the documents that you need. Please, find the attached file. >>Correct In additon, WHEN will I know the Admission Board's final decision?  >>In addition, when will I know the Admission Board's final decision?  It is very important for me to know the result of the admission as soon as possible in order to get a students loan. >>CorrectI am looking forward  hearing from you soon. Take care.>>I am looking forward  hear from you soon. Take care.I've been trying to contact you by e-mail several times, but no reply; I think there would be some problems with my computer while I was sending an e-mail.  >>I've been trying to contact you by e-mail several times, but there was no reply; I think there was some problem with my computer while I was sending an e-mail.  Therefore, I emamil againg with all the docuents that you said before. >>Therefore, I sent an email again with all the documents that you said before.