Hi Grace,

2010-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

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There has been much argument among people over whether corporal punishmen in schools is necessary It sounds reasonable that the use of corporal punishement helps teachers lead their class more effectively and more efficently.. However this tense atmosphere in the class can bring negetive effects on students in the long run. students who are severly scolded in front of many other students get really frestated.In fact, corporal punishemnet is more of an obstacle than a catalyst fot better studies. For instance, when one of my middle shool friedns was dozzing off during class becouse of his tirednees from stydying late at nigh, a mathematic teacher told him to come, slapping him in the face in front of many other students, thus humiliating him ever.

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Hi [이름]! It is really heartbreaking that for some people, corporal punishment is a good way to teach students a lesson. I am glad that you are open to this situation. I hope that this will be put to an end so the students would not be traumatized. Anyway, have a great day ahead of you! ^_^   There has been much argument among people over whether corporal punishmen in schools is necessary >> There has been much argument among people whether corporal punishment in schoold is necessary.It sounds reasonable that the use of corporal punishement helps teachers lead their class more effectively and more efficently.. >> It sounds reasonable that the use of corporal punishment helps teacher lead their class more effectively and more efficiently. However this tense atmosphere in the class can bring negetive effects on students in the long run. >> However, this tense atmosphere in class can bring negative effects on students in the long run.students who are severly scolded in front of many other students get really frestated. >> Students who are being scolded infront of the class get really frustrated and humiliated. In fact, corporal punishemnet is more of an obstacle than a catalyst fot better studies. >> In fact, corporal punishment is more of an obstacle than a motivation to study more. For instance, when one of my middle shool friedns was dozzing off during class becouse of his tirednees from stydying late at nigh, a mathematic teacher told him to come, slapping him in the face in front of many other students, thus humiliating him ever. >> For example, when one of my middle school friends slept in class because he was so tired because of studying late at night, out math teacher called his attention, slapped him in front of the class, thus humiliating him.

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