Hi Jacey~~

2016-10-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jacey

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Did you go to the gym last day? Of course, diet can be good, but exercise will be more good for your health. Anyway here is my sectences, Could you check it for me? Bye~~ Q4. What makes you apply for this company? I think that there will be an opportunity where the growth is These past years, s-energy has continued its growth and I am sure that it will be sustained for the future. Because new renewable energy industry has been growing very fast and S-Energy is one of the top companies in this industry. And now you are expanding your business overseas for becoming a global company. It is supported by numbers. When I see your financial statements, sales has risen continuously for 3 years. And also the operating income and net income have risen continuously for 2 years. I could find strong growth potential as specific numbers. That is why I apply for your company.

강사 첨삭


Hi [이름]! o^_^o


Thanks for your concern regarding my health.

I stopped going to the gym 7 or 8 months ago because I had no time to exercise. :D

I had to read a lot of books.

Anyway, I will try to go back to the gym maybe next month. :D


I think we were able to tackle this question during one of our classes.

It\'s good that you were able to say something good about the company and

you showed that you want to be a part of it.

Good job! :)



--- Teacher Jacey :)



Did you go to the gym last day?

>> Did you g to the gym the last time?



Of course, diet can be good, but exercise will be more good for your health.

>> Of course, diet can be good, but exercise is better for your health.



Anyway here is my sectences, Could you check it for me? Bye~~

>> Anyway here are my sentences.



Could you check it for me? Bye~~

>> Correct



Q4. What makes you apply for this company?

>> Correct



I think that there will be an opportunity where the growth is.

>> I think that applying here in your company would give me an opportunity for growth.



These past years, s-energy has continued its growth and I am sure that it will be sustained for the future.

>> These past years, S-Energy has continued its growth and I am sure that it will be sustained in the future.



Because new renewable energy industry has been growing very fast and S-Energy is one of the top companies in this industry.

>> Correct



And now you are expanding your business overseas for becoming a global company.

>> And now you are expanding your business overseas to become a global company.



It is supported by numbers.

>> Correct



When I see your financial statements, sales has risen continuously for 3 years.

>> Correct



And also the operating income and net income have risen continuously for 2 years.

>> Also, the operating and net income have risen continuously for 2 years.



I could find strong growth potential as specific numbers.

>> I find strong growth potential as specific numbers.



That is why I apply for your company.

>> That is why I want to apply in your company.



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