Hi Jenny

2010-04-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jennifer

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i wanna write about today. i met my friends and we went to shopping. we walked really alot. i think that i am not that healthy. i mean, i am healthy but my physical strength is very totally weak. actually when i go shopping with my friends they treat me like a baby. i dont like the place where narrow is and many people are. i whine and complain in those place and my heart starts hammering. i doubt maybe i have panic disorder and claustrophobia. i love shopping but those things disturb me seriously. or maybe i aint grown up enough yet :( or i just have no patience.

강사 첨삭

[이름], Thanks for the compo... Keep it up! ^^ Jenny    i wanna write about today. >>I want to write something today >>>you donn't use "wanna" in writing sentences since it is an English slang although, you can use this when talking to a person. i met my friends and we went to shopping. >>I met my friends and we went shopping >>>remember; always start your sentences with a capital letter.we walked really alot. >>We walked for so long.  i think that i am not that healthy. >>I think that I am not that healthy. i mean, i am healthy but my physical strength is very totally weak. >>I think that I am not that physically fit for walking. actually when i go shopping with my friends they treat me like a baby. >>Actually, when I go shopping with my friends they always treat me like a baby. i dont like the place where narrow is and many people are. >>I don't like places which are too narrow and very crowded.  i whine and complain in those place and my heart starts hammering. >>I always whine because when I am in those places my heart starts pounding. i doubt maybe i have panic disorder and claustrophobia. >>I think that maybe I have a panic disorder and a little claustrophobic >>>CLAUSTROPHOBIA- sickness; CLAUSTROPHOBIC -  feeling i love shopping but those things disturb me seriously. >>I love shopping but those things are too disturbing for me. or maybe i aint grown up enough yet :( >>Maybe at some point I'm not that matured.or i just have no patience. >>or sometimes I am just impatient.

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