Hi Julie

2011-03-28 · 첨삭 강사 Julie

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Dear [Name] was your weekend? I spent my weekend in Malaysia to attending a wedding party of a cousin of my boyfriend. It was a very busy weekend to me. Anyway, I am a little nervous at the moment. You know that I am going to start working tomorrow. I am afraid of facing with new envoronment. Particularly, Communicating with the staffs in new company is one of my concern. So I need to your advice about how can I talk with the staffs in that company first time. I am looking forward to talking with you at our class. Thank you. ^_______________________^

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My dear Kimmy, My weekend was a blast. I attended a birthday party with my cousin. I think that you too had a great weekend.^^  As for your new work,I know that you be fine. Just relax and be yourself~~ Talk to you later.. Xoxo, Julie~~ Below are your corrections: Dear [Name]>>Correct^^How was your weekend? >>Correct^^I spent my weekend in Malaysia to attending a wedding party of a cousin of my boyfriend. >>I spent my weekend in Malaysia to attend a wedding party of my boyfriend’s cousin. It was a very busy weekend to me.>>It was a very busy weekend for me.Anyway, I am a little nervous at the moment. >>Correct^^ You know that I am going to start working tomorrow. >>Correct^^ I am afraid of facing with new envoronment. >>I’m afraid of the new environment I’m going to face. Particularly, Communicating with the staffs in new company is one of my concern. >> Particularly, in communicating with the staffs in the new company is one of my concern. So I need to your advice about how can I talk with the staffs in that company first time. >> So I need to your advice about how can I talk with the staffs in that company for the first time. I am looking forward to talking with you at our class.>>I am looking forward to talking to you at our class.Thank you. ^_______________________^ >>Correct^^

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