Hi, June ~

2010-11-08 · 첨삭 강사 June

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Todaynight I will do my homewalk early and go to bed directly for my heath. You too! Wake up early! I want to say you one proverb. The bird wakes up early can find a feed. Today I have time to spare. I went to mart and bookstore. I come back home with pizza, snack and comicbook. I lie down on the bed and read a comicbook eatting food. Oh! How wonderful weekend! And I read some mystery book "murder prophet" by Dean koontz. Possibly you know him or his book. He is a bestseller writer. Oh, the book is very scary. I can't sleep alone. I yet do re-enrollment callenglish, but I will enroll tomorrow. Maybe tomorrow is our last class before re-enrollment, expect supplementary lesson. Perhabs I haver one supplementary class. I wish that we have happness time tomorrow. bye June !

강사 첨삭

Hi, Kong Min! I'm glad that you're getting the habit of writing every week. Keep working on your grammar, such as the use of conjunctions and verb tenses, and be more careful with spelling, okay? ^^ The proverb you shared sounds like a popular one that goes like this: "The early bird catches the worm." Is that what you meant? Although I have seen a lot of Dean Koontz's novels, I have not read any of his books. Sorry! My cousins are the ones who like those kinds of novels. Do those books come in Korean? I would be delighted to know that you read them in English. ^^ ~June Todaynight I will do my homewalk early and go to bed directly for my heath. You too! Wake up early!   >> Tonight, I will do my homework early so I can go to bed directly for better health. You too! Wake up early! I want to say you one proverb. The bird wakes up early can find a feed. >> I want to share a proverb: "The bird that wakes up early can find the food".Today I have time to spare. I went to mart and bookstore. I come back home with pizza, snack and comicbook >>Today, I had time to spare. I went to the mart and bookstore then came back home with pizza, snacks, and a comic book.  I lie down on the bed and read a comicbook eatting food. >> I laid down on the bed and read a comic book while eating.Oh! How wonderful weekend! >> Oh! What a wonderful weekend!And I read some mystery book "murder prophet" by Dean koontz. Possibly you know him or his book. He is a bestseller writer. >> I read this mystery  book "Murder Prophet" by Dean Koontz. You might possibly know him or his books. He is a bestselling writer. Oh, the book is very scary. I can't sleep alone. >> CorrectI yet do re-enrollment callenglish, but I will enroll tomorrow. >> I haven't re-enrolled for phone English class yet, but I will tomorrow.Maybe tomorrow is our last class before re-enrollment, expect supplementary lesson. Perhabs I haver one supplementary class. >> Tomorrow may be our last class before re-enrolment but I might have one supplementary class.I wish that we have happness time tomorrow. >> I wish that we have a happy time tomorrow.bye June ! >> Correct >> Bye June! (Better)

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