Hi karla:D

2010-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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Hi again! we spent whole of our time talking about amercian singers or shows. It was not bad,was good! sometimes It'd be better than spending time talking about educational book! because you know it's funny! I could have spoken in british accent,but I didn't. because I couldn't remember some kind of sentences which are fit in british accent. but I'll prepare for you on Monday! I'll read the script of 'SKINS',because It's on my computer ! By the way,You seem to have similar styles in choosing shows or songs. That's why I like you! I hope that you'll hear 'New Divide' sang by Linkin Park,and I also recommend 'It's all about you' sang by Mcfly I said a while ago. (You may know this song,for it's too popular!) See you on Monday! [이름]

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

 I had a great time talking to you! I think I have the interests of a highschool girl! haha! Because we have so much in common. Well,your composition is very good. I think you are not a typical teenager. You are special! Anyway, these are my corrections:

Karla

Hi again!

>>correct
we spent whole of our time talking about amercian singers or shows.

>>correct
It was not bad,was good!

>>It was not bad, it was good!
sometimes It'd be better than spending time talking about educational book!

>>Sometimes it'd be better than spending time talking about an educational book!

because you know it's funny!

>>correct
I could have spoken in british accent,but I didn't.

>>correct
because I couldn't remember some kind of sentences which are fit in british accent.

>>Because I couldn't remember some kind of sentence which fits the british accent.
but I'll prepare for you on Monday!

>>correct
I'll read the script of 'SKINS',because It's on my computer!

>>correct
By the way,You seem to have similar styles in choosing shows or songs.

>>correct
That's why I like you!

>>correct
I hope that you'll hear 'New Divide' sang by Linkin Park,and I also recommend 'It's all about you' sang by Mcfly I said a while ago.

>>correct
(You may know this song,for it's too popular!)
>>correct
See you on Monday!
>>correct

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