Hi~ Klein^^

2013-12-02 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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Hi there~~~ Do you having a good day now? I'm going to client office now.^^ Thesedays, we don't have many working. So, we must go to thier office to request that a piece of work. I think of business is this. Of course, business is must need to good item and good ability. But, ability of get a piece of work for our client is must to need for ours.^^ However, this is very hard to me. Maybe, If i will get this, it is after 10 yaers later. ^^haha Anyway, I would get many things for my client with help my boss.^^ Therefore, you must cheer up yourself like me. Bye From Kirk.

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To my dear Kirk: I can say that so far, my day is going pretty well. I will be heading home in just a couple of minutes, maybe 21 minutes later. Kirk, I think your interpersonal skills are good enough, so you can close deals with your prospective clients with no sweat. You simply have to watch your words and be clear with the services that you can offer to them. I am quite sure that they\'ll be captured by your team\'s hardwork and perseverance to get the job done. You need not to wait for 10 years, Kirk. Every single conversation or meeting with a client is unique, so you just have to be better each time you make some deals with them. Keep safe, Kirk! I know that you can do it! Just believe in yourself because those people around you count on you. I am counting on you! Good luck, Kirk! Wishing you well, _Klein Hi there~~~>>CorrectDo you having a good day now?>>Do you have a good day? >>Are you having a good day? >>Is it a good day for you?I\'m going to client office now.^^>>I\'m going to my client\'s office now.Thesedays, we don\'t have many working.>>These days, we don\'t have many work. >>These days, we don\'t have a lot of work.So, we must go to thier office to request that a piece of work.>>So we must go to their office to ask for a piece of work. >>So we must go to their office to request for a piece of work. >>So we need to pay a visit to their office to ask for a piece of work.I think of business is this.>>I think this is what our business is about. >>I think this is what business is like. >>I think this is just how our business works.Of course, business is must need to good item and good ability.>>Of course, in any kind of business, we need to have good abilities to get the good item. >>Of course, in any kind of business, we need to have a good ability to close a deal for good items.But, ability of get a piece of work for our client is must to need for ours.^^>>But the ability to get a piece of work from our clients is a need for us.However, this is very hard to me.>>However, this is very hard for me. >>However, I find it hard.Maybe, If i will get this, it is after 10 yaers later. ^^haha>>Maybe, I will get this 10 years later. >>Maybe, if ever I will acquire this skill or ability, it would be after 10 years.Anyway, I would get many things for my client with help my boss.^^>>Anyway, I will get many things for my client with the help of my boss. >>Anyway, I will assist my boss in getting some materials for our client.Therefore, you must cheer up yourself like me.>>Therefore, you must cheer yourself up like I do.Bye From Kirk. >>Correct

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