Hi, long time no talk. I\'ve missed you during Laos.

2019-08-05 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK: What do you think is a possible solution on the issue between Korea and Japan? Modern times are not invaded by force as in the past, but are invaded economically. It is always difficult to make an intimate neighbor, and Japan has always harassed Korea historically. Japanese are personally polite, but when collective, they are historically scary. I think the economic issues between Korea and Japan are caused by human greed. For the time being, it is difficult to solve the problem because reason can not control emotion. After time has passed and many have been broken, I think that if reason dominates, it will be solved. I think politicians are really important, and a person who is genuinely thinking of his people, whether he or she are in korea or Japan, should do politics. I think greedy political leaders make their people hard and lead to a backward history, so we should pick out political leaders well.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son!


Thank you so much for this composition!

You were away for quite a long time.

I missed having classes with you too! ^^

So, welcome back.

I know that the issue between Japan and Korea is very sensitive.

And I appreciate the input you gave regarding this matter.


~~t. Ally



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Modern times are not invaded by force as in the past, but are invaded economically.

>> Modern times are not invaded by force as it was in the past, but are invaded economically.


 It is always difficult to make an intimate neighbor, and Japan has always harassed Korea historically.

>>  It is always difficult to make an intimate neighbor, and historically, Japan has always harassed Korea.


 Japanese are personally polite, but when collective, they are historically scary.

>> CORRECT!


 I think the economic issues between Korea and Japan are caused by human greed.

>> CORRECT!


 For the time being, it is difficult to solve the problem because reason can not control emotion.

>>  For the time being, it is difficult to solve the problem because reason cannot control the emotion.


 After time has passed and many have been broken, I think that if reason dominates, it will be solved.

>> CORRECT!


 I think politicians are really important, and a person who is genuinely thinking of his people, whether he or she are in korea or Japan, should do politics.

>>  I think politicians are really important, and anyone who is genuinely thinking of the people, whether he or she is in Korea or Japan, should do politics.


 I think greedy political leaders make their people hard and lead to a backward history, so we should pick out political leaders well.

>>  I think greedy political leaders make their people live a hard life and lead to a backwards history, so we should pick out political leaders well.



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