Hi Louis
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Hi how was your weekend? I think you spend a good time with your freinds. I triped sith my girl on saturday. We had a little comflict, but we solved on the good way.
To return to the h/w, you gave me interesting topic. In my opinion, our social problem in Korea is youth unimploent. Many young people cant catch the job after school. Two In ten young people dont have a job. And three in ten are in temporary position. Others who got the job also draw a low salary. Only few people monopolize a lot of wealth. After 10 years, it wouid become a very serious problem in the world. Their anger who dont have a wealth will explode to the theit own society.
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Hello, [이름]!
Thank you very much for your homework. Anyway, I had a great weekend, but I wasn't able to visit my best friend. However, after work, I might go and visit her. How about you? I hope you had a great one, too, though you had a little fight with your girlfriend. We'll talk more about this later. See you in class, [이름]! Take care.
-Louise-
Hi how was your weekend?
>> Hi! How was your weekend?
I think you spend a good time with your freinds.
>> I think you spent a good time with your freinds.
I triped sith my girl on saturday.
>> I had an argument with my girlfriend last Saturday.
We had a little comflict, but we solved on the good way.
>> We had a little conflict, but we solved it in a good way.To return to the h/w, you gave me interesting topic.
>> Anyway, going to the homework, you gave me an interesting topic.
In my opinion, our social problem in Korea is youth unimploent.
>> In my opinion, our social problem in Korea is youth unemployment.
Many young people cant catch the job after school.
>> Many young people can't land a job after school.
Two In ten young people dont have a job.
>> 2 out of 10 young people don't have a job.
And three in ten are in temporary position.
>>Also, 3 out of 10 are in a temporary position.
Others who got the job also draw a low salary.
>> Others even get a low salary.
Only few people monopolize a lot of wealth.
>> Only few people get the chance of being wealthy.
After 10 years, it wouid become a very serious problem in the world.
>> After 10 years, it would become a very serious problem in the world.
Their anger who dont have a wealth will explode to the theit own society.
>> The anger of those unfortunate will soon unfold to their respective societies.
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