Hi Mayleen

2022-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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The worst one is that when i was young i had dream of becoming a football player and i asked my mother to send me to a football learning school but she rejected because she have heard the school have a bad punishment for teaching That was so disappointed for me at that time And the best acceptance is the acceptance to my first job. Before that i rejected some companies and i was nervous. But my first superior who was the interviewer hired me to my first company.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, One!

(^__^)

Thank you so much for this composition.

I have made some modifications or corrections that you can use for review later on.

I will see you later in class. Enjoy the rest of your afternoon.^^

Practice English whenever you can!

__T. Mayleen :)

>>> The worst one is that when I was young, I had a dream of becoming a football player, and I asked my mother to send me to a football learning school, but she rejected it because she had heard the school\'s reputation for poor instruction.
That was so disappointed for me at that time

>>> That was so disappointing for me at that time.

And the best acceptance is the acceptance to my first job.

>>> My first job acceptance is the best acceptance.

Before that i rejected some companies and i was nervous.

>>> I had been rejected by some companies before that, and I was nervous.

But my first superior who was the interviewer hired me to my first company.

>>> However, the person who hired me for my first company was my first superior, who was the interviewer.

>>> OR: I was, however, employed by my first boss, who also served as my interviewer.

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