Hi, Mayleen!

2018-02-12 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: Creative Writing: Safety Question: Do people need guns? Answer in 2-3 sentences. ^-^ I object to an individual possessing a gun, because Korea or Japan is a safe country because it does not allow guns. I think the Philippines or the United States is a very dangerous country because of gun possession, and gun accidents happen constantly.

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Good evening, Mr. [Name]!
Happy Monday to you! (^_^)//

I respect your opinion. I am also torn between having a gun for protection and not having it to have a safer place/country.
It\'s true there are so many gun related incidents here.
Let\'s just hope that most of those people are responsible gun owners.
Have a good night!

_T. Mayleen :)

I object to an individual possessing a gun, because Korea or Japan is a safe country because it does not allow guns.
>>> It\'s not allowed for individuals to possess guns in Korea and Japan so they\'re safe places.

I think the Philippines or the United States is a very dangerous country because of gun possession, and gun accidents happen constantly.
>>> I think the Philippines or the United States is a very dangerous country because of gun possession and gun related incidents/crimes.

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