Hi, Mayleen!
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
Choose one (1) topic and describe/discuss it in 2-3 sentences.
a) your personality
b) your role model
c) childhood friend
b) my role model
I haven't thought about my role model, but I still respect Magellan who first traveled around the world to prove that the Earth is round.
His trip around the world, which took about three years using a powerless sailing boat, is a pioneering spirit our young people should follow.
강사 첨삭
Happy Thursday! (^_^)
Mr. [Name], this composition is really nice.
However, Ferdinand Magellan was killed by a Filipino datu (village leader) when they tried to conquer Mactan Island. Anyway, thank you for doing your homework.^^
_T. Mayleen :)
I haven\'t thought about my role model, but I still respect Magellan who first traveled around the world to prove that the Earth is round.
>>> CORRECT!
His trip around the world, which took about three years using a powerless sailing boat, is a pioneering spirit our young people should follow.
>>> CORRECT!
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