Hi, Mayleen!

2018-04-12 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: [OPINION] Do television shows and videos online teach children violence? Why or why not? Kindly answer in not more than three(3) sentences. ^-^ Of course, I think television shows and videos online make young people violent. I think people who make violent movies or games for teenagers should think more carefully, and should make movies and videos with beautiful and thoughtful plots. Whether it is legal or ethical, I think violent movies and games should be restricted and filtered a lot before they are sold.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Mr. [Name]! ^-^)/ Happy Thursday!

Thank you so much for doing your homework.

I totally agree with your answers. Of course, parents/adults also need to supervise their children when watching TV.

I will see you then again tomorrow.^^ Good night!

_T. Mayleen :)

Of course, I think television shows and videos online make young people violent.
>>> Correct!
I think people who make violent movies or games for teenagers should think more carefully, and should make movies and videos with beautiful and thoughtful plots.
>>> Correct!
Whether it is legal or ethical, I think violent movies and games should be restricted and filtered a lot before they are sold.

>>> Correct!

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