Hi, Mayleen!

2018-04-30 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: [Writing Exercise] What images spring to mind when you hear the word 'money'? Answer in not more than 3 sentences. ^-^ When I think of the word money, I think first of the rich and I wish I had money more. I also think if a person has a lot of money, they can do everything, money makes them feel comfortable, and can be very uncomfortable. You must also know that money is a frightening stuff that can even ruin a person.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Mr. [Name]! ^-^ Happy Monday!

Thank you so much for doing your homework. (^.^)

You did a good job here! I have made some modifications though.

We can talk about this later in class. See you then!

_T. Mayleen :)

When I think of the word money, I think first of the rich and I wish I had money more.
>>> When I think of the word money, I first think of being rich and I wish I had more money.

I also think if a person has a lot of money, they can do everything, money makes them feel comfortable, and can be very uncomfortable.
>>> I also think that a person with a lot of money can do anything that he likes and money makes him feel comfortable but I can also be very uncomfortable.

You must also know that money is a frightening stuff that can even ruin a person.

>>> One must know that money is a frightening thing and that I can even ruin a person.

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