Hi, Mayleen!

2018-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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If you would become the president for just one day, what would you do, and why? Answer in not more than three (3) sentences.^-^ If I were to be president for only one day, I would like to untie all restrictions so that all young people could have jobs. And it will restore the death penalty to get rid of the evil in the world. Finally, I will close a lot of colleges which are not very necessary.

강사 첨삭

Happy Thursday, Mr. [Name]! ^^,)

This is a good composition. Thank you so much for your effort.

You did a good job here!^^ I will see you then again tomorrow.

Have a good night!

_T. Mayleen :)

If I were to be president for only one day, I would like to untie all restrictions so that all young people could have jobs.
>>> If I were to be the president for only one day, firstly, I would like to undo/remove all restrictions so that all young people could apply for jobs.
And it will restore the death penalty to get rid of the evil in the world.
>>> Secondly, I will restore death penalty to get rid of evil in the world.
Finally, I will close a lot of colleges which are not very necessary.

>>> Lastly, I would colleges which are not very necessary.

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