Hi, Mayleen!

2018-09-18 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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HOMEWORK: [Writing Exercise] Imagine yourself at the age 70. How would you describe yourself? Answer in not more than three (3) sentences.^-^ I think 70 is the golden age of our lives, so we should be healthy and welcome to the age of 70 to have a good golden age. I hope I'm traveling around the world as planned by the age of 70. And I think I should be more generous when dealing with everything.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Mr. [Name]! ^-^)

Thank you so much for doing your homework. I have read it well and I can say that you did a good job. I will talk to you again tomorrow.

Have a good night!

_T. Mayleen :)

I think 70 is the golden age of our lives, so we should be healthy and welcome to the age of 70 to have a good golden age.
>>> I think 70 is the golden age of our lives, so we should be healthy to welcome the age of 70 - - the golden age.

I hope I\'m traveling around the world as planned by the age of 70.
>>> I would like to travel around the world by the age of 70.

And I think I should be more generous when dealing with everything.
>>> I also think that I should be more generous when dealing about things around me.

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