hi, shy ^^
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Hello Ms. [Name]!!
I agree with you on that one Ms. [Name], we are sometimes
incapable of controlling our spending especially if we know that we have the
money on our hands.. It takes a whole lot of self-discipline and I am also
still working on that hehe!! I am a spender especially on pay day..^^
See you in class!!
T. Shy
feedback => cash vs credit
card
>> Correct
Cash is real money such as coins and bills.
>> Correct
It's for consumption.
>> Correct
It' can be used to buy or sell somethings.
>> It' can be used to buy or sell some things.
Credit card is not real money but has a same function like as cash.
>> Credit card is not real money but has the
same function like cash.
I prefer to credit card because it's
convenient for me to pay.
>> I prefer to use credit card because it's
convenient for me to pay.
I cannot carry amount of cash in my wallet
all the time,
>> I cannot carry large amount of cash in my
wallet all the time,
so i just take credit cards in it.
>> so I just take credit cards in it. (Capitalize “I” because it’s a proper noun)
It has both merits and demerits.
>> Correct
If we could't control to use credit cards, we will be in big financial trouble.
>> If we couldn’t control to use credit
cards, we will be in big financial trouble.
That reason is why some people still using
only cash.
>> That is the reason why some people still use cash.
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