hi, shy ^^

2010-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

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feedback => cash vs credit card Cash is real money such as coins and bills. It's for consumption. It' can be used to buy or sell somethings. Credit card is not real money but has a same function like as cash. I prefer to credit card because it's convenient for me to pay. I cannot carry amount of cash in my wallet all the time, so i just take credit cards in it. It has both merits and demerits. If we could't control to use credit cards, we will be in big financial trouble. That reason is why some people still using only cash.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [Name]!!

I agree with you on that one Ms. [Name], we are sometimes incapable of controlling our spending especially if we know that we have the money on our hands.. It takes a whole lot of self-discipline and I am also still working on that hehe!! I am a spender especially on pay day..^^
See you in class!!
T. Shy
feedback => cash vs credit card

>> Correct
Cash is real money such as coins and bills.

>> Correct
It's for consumption.

>> Correct
It' can be used to buy or sell somethings. 

>> It' can be used to buy or sell some things. 
Credit card is not real money but has a same function like as cash.

>> Credit card is not real money but has the same function like cash.
I prefer to credit card because it's convenient for me to pay.

>> I prefer to use credit card because it's convenient for me to pay.
I cannot carry amount of cash in my wallet all the time, 

>> I cannot carry large amount of cash in my wallet all the time, 
so i just take credit cards in it.

>> so I just take credit cards in it. (Capitalize “I” because it’s a proper noun)
It has both merits and demerits.

>> Correct
If we could't control to use credit cards, we will be in big financial trouble. 

>> If we couldn’t control to use credit cards, we will be in big financial trouble. 
That reason is why some people still using only cash.

>> That is the reason why some people still use cash.

 

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