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Our country have terrible problem which are birth rate drop and senirs citizen who lives alone.
I am very sad because many people can not give birth. They want to buy thier own house. so they live as the double income family to get more. And high educated man want to use many kind of private educational system. They know how cute childrens are and how important they are. But in nature, it is very difficult to take care of children. So goverment have to spend more money to solve this problem.
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Hello Again [이름],
This is really a sad situation. I hope that the birth rate problem will be quickly solved to increase the population of the young people. Thank you for sharing this information with me.
-Rachel
Our country have terrible problem which are birth rate drop and seniors citizen who lives alone.
>> Our country have terrible problems such as decreasing birth rates and senior citizens living alone.
I am very sad because many people can not give birth.
I am very sad because many people can not give birth.
>> correct
>> I feel sad because many people cannot give birth.
They want to buy thier own house. so they live as the double income family to get more.
>> They want to buy their own house, so they have to earn more and should have double income.
And high educated man want to use many kind of private educational system.
>> And highly educated people want to send their children to private institutions.
They know how cute children are and how important they are.
>> correct
But in nature, it is very difficult to take care of children. So goverment have to spend more money to solve this problem.
>> But in reality, it is very difficult to take care of children, so the government have to spend more money to solve this problem.
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