Hi teacher~~
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People compete in sport, games, the economy and many other areas of life. What is good and bad about competition?
Acually, I don\'t mind who win. I satisfy about enjoying the sports and games. But sometimes, when I aquire winning that is for lunch, I was very happy and exciting. So then people would like to win of that. I think the good things which compete in that is that we could relieve our stress and our skill would achieve. and the bad things which compete in that is we could get stress more than before.
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Hello Miss [이름]! Thank you for completing your homework today. You pointed out the good and bad sides of competing really well. Keep up your good work!~~T.Dee
>>Actually, I don\'t mind who wins. I am satisfied enjoying the sports and games.
But sometimes, when I aquire winning that is for lunch, I was very happy and exciting.
>>But sometimes, when I win something like a free lunch, I am very happy and excited.
So then people would like to win of that.
>>People would like to win a prize.
I think the good things which compete in that is that we could relieve our stress and our skill would achieve.
>>I think the good things about competing are we could relieve our stress and our skills would improve.
and the bad things which compete in that is we could get stress more than before.
>>And one bad thing about competing is that we could get stress more than before.
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