Hi Teacher~~
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Is there a good library in your neighborhood? How often do you go to the library?
Before I move to here, there is a library in front of my house. I was very happy. So whenever I and my kids went to home from church, we droped by there. Nowaday, although we have to go to another library by bus, the library is way bigger than there. And there are a lot of books for kids. The best thing is that the library is with a beautiful park. So after we borrow some books, we can walk around the park. If it is not hot day, we could go to there by walk. And we went to there once a week.^^
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Hello Miss [이름]! That library you\'re talking about seems to be a good place to study. I am guessing that the amazing view could give a relaxing sensation. Enjoy your day!~~T.Dee
>>Before I moved here, there is a library in front of my house.
I was very happy.
>>CORRECT!
So whenever I and my kids went to home from church, we droped by there.
>>Whenever I and my kids get home from the church, we drop by the library.
>>OR: I and my kids used to go there after we attend out church service.
Nowaday, although we have to go to another library by bus, the library is way bigger than there.
>>Nowadays, although we have to go to another library by bus, the library is way bigger than the previous one we used to go to.
And there are a lot of books for kids.
>>There are lots of books for kids.
The best thing is that the library is with a beautiful park.
>>The best thing about it is that it has a beautiful park.
So after we borrow some books, we can walk around the park.
>>After we borrow some books, we can walk around the park.
If it is not hot day, we could go to there by walk.
>>If it is not a hot day, we could go to there by walking.
And we went to there once a week.
>>We go there once a week.
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