hi teacher

2017-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Today I'll tell you about winter weather. this winter was warm and It didn't snow. I like snow but it didn't snow so I was sad. I want to do many stuff when it's snowing. I want to do snow sleding,skating,snow fight. but I can't do it because It's not snowing. I think it's because global warming. I want to protect the earth. A way to stopping a global warming is I have to recycled and plant trees. I wish It sonw.

강사 첨삭

Oh, don\'t be sad about it, [이름].

I hope that it will snow, soon.

Yes, you are right.

So, start taking care of the Earth.

Start it with yourself.

Anyway, just be happy.

Let\'s just wait for the snow.

~Teacher Chloe

Today I\'ll tell you about winter weather. 

>>Today, I am going to tell you about the winter season.                                            
this winter was warm and It didn\'t snow. 

>>This winter is warm. It hasn\'t snowed yet.                                              
I like snow but it didn\'t snow so I was sad.

>>Correct!                                          
I want to do many stuff when it\'s snowing. 

>>Correct!

OR:
>>I want to do many outdoor activities in winter.      

OR:

>>I like doing outdoor activities in winter.                                     
I want to do snow sleding,skating,snow fight. 

>>I want to do snow sledding, skating and snow ball fighting.                              
but I can\'t do it because It\'s not snowing.

>>But, I couldn\'t do them because it is not snowy.
 I think it\'s because global warming.

>>I think it\'s because of global warming.
I want to protect the earth.

>>Correct!
A way to stopping a global warming is I have to recycled and plant trees.
>>One to way to stop it is by recycling and planting trees.  

I wish It sonw.

>>I wish it would snow soon.

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