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2019-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

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The most interesting city to visit in my country is Jeju lisland. Actually, another country are very similar. Seoul has all of thing to visit in korea. Because it has a lot of culture places and new trendy buildings. But Jeju lisland was very differrent. First it made by volcanic ash so We can see stones of black and many palm trees. If we get on a ship in Jeju, we are able to visit another lisland. I recommand that you drink a coffee with big window and palm trees in a shop by the beach.

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~~T.Dee


The most interesting city to visit in my country is Jeju lisland.

>>The most interesting city to visit in my country is Jeju lsland.

Actually, another country are very similar. Seoul has all of thing to visit in korea.

>>Actually, other countries are very similar. Seoul has all the thing to visit in Korea.

Because it has a lot of culture places and new trendy buildings.

>>Because it has a lot of cultural places and new trendy buildings.

But Jeju lisland was very differrent.

>>But, Jeju lsland was very different.

First it made by volcanic ash so We can see stones of black and many palm trees.

>>Firstly, because it is made of volcanic ash we can black stones and many palm trees.

If we get on a ship in Jeju, we are able to visit another lisland.

>>If we get on a ship in Jeju, we are able to visit another island.

I recommand that you drink a coffee with big window and palm trees in a shop by the beach.

>>I recommend that you drink coffee overlooking from the big window and palm trees in a shop by the beach.

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