Hi, teacher. It\'s my homework.
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Using cell phones too much is bad.
Because I think, cell phones expel electric wave.
electrik wave bad physical and mental healty.
For example, if cell phones too much seeing, Their have will headache.
Also, brain cell does not activate in one\'s head.
Good night.^^
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1. Using cell phones too much is bad.
>>Using cell phones too much is not good.
2. Because I think, cell phones expel electric wave.
>> Because I think, cell phones release electric wave.
>>Electric wave is bad physically and mentally.
>>For example, if you look at the cell phone for a longtime, you will get a headache.
5. Also, brain cell does not activate in one\'s head.
>> Also, brain cells do not activate in one\'s head.
Good.
-T. Melody ^^
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