Hi there^^

2013-11-29 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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Hi there klein^^ How are you. I feel good today. Well.... I decide one thing about my planning this day. In fact... I want to make something for my dream. I have many dream to singer and business man and orther something. To make something for my dream, i need more experience. In fact... I want to go that other country is make more experience. So, I need to speak English better. As a result, I decided that study English more eagerly. Maybe, I will say to my boss(dad) about it until month end, i may shorten my working time until year end. So i will have more study hours. I need your help Klein. I must prepare more for our class, therefore please help me. good night Klein. From Dae Young. Home work. 1.My memory remember one person who my a predecessor when i military duty. He was always on the go. He was ding heavy on everyday. Korean saying "Kkap Chi Da." 2.I was remembered, he was sycophant also.^^;;

강사 첨삭

My dear Dae Young,

I honestly share your frustrations. I want to do a lot of things but time and chances simply don\'t permit me.

In my case, I want to be a visual artist. When I have nothing else to do, I work on mixed media and create a piece of art.

To some extent, I would also like to run my own business but I am not yet sure what kind of business it would be.

I still need to think about it.

Oh, Kirk, you do have a point in saying that you need more experiences in those fields that you want to pursue.

I think the same way!

We are young at heart, right? So come to think of it, even though chances are not yet in our way, maybe in one of these days, we will just bump into what we\'ve been truly yearning for.

Dae Young, just keep on speaking in English.

Our hard work and efforts will pay off in due time.

Keep safe!

You will always be in my prayers, Dae Young.

_Klein

Hi there klein^^
>>Correct

OR >> Hi there, Klein!
How are you.

>>How are you?

I feel good today.
>>Correct
Well.... I decide one thing about my planning this day.
>>Well, I have decided on one thing for my plan this day.

>>Well, I came up with a decision after planning for this day.
In fact... I want to make something for my dream.
>>Correct

OR >> In fact, I want to fulfill one of my dreams.

I have many dream to singer and business man and orther something.
>>I have many dreams like becoming a singer, a business man, and many more.
To make something for my dream, i need more experience.
>>To achieve some of my dreams, I need more experiences in these fields.
In fact... I want to go that other country is make more experience.
>>In fact, I want to go to another country to earn a different kind of experience.
So, I need to speak English better.
>>Correct

OR >> So I need to be better at speaking English.
As a result, I decided that study English more eagerly.
>>As a result, I decided to study English more eagerly.
Maybe, I will say to my boss(dad) about it until month end, i may shorten my working time until year end.
>>Maybe I will tell my boss by the end of the month that I may shorten my working time next month.
So i will have more study hours.
>>Correct

OR >> So I can have more hours to study.
I need your help Klein.

>>Correct

I must prepare more for our class, therefore please help me.
>>Correct
good night Klein.
>>Correct

OR >> Good night, Klein.
From Dae Young.
>>Correct
Home work.
1.My memory remember one person who my a predecessor when i military duty.

>>From my memory, there is this person who was my predecessor when I was rendering my military service.
He was always on the go.

>>Correct!

He was ding heavy on everyday.

>>He was hard on us every day.

Korean saying \"Kkap Chi Da.\"
>>As the Korean saying goes, \"kkap Chi da.\"
2.I was remembered, he was sycophant also.^^;;

>>I can also remember that he was a sycophant.

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