Hi There^^
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Klein^^
How are you?
Today, My computer had some problems.
The biggest problem is to do not connect to internet.
So, It is hard work, to upload My home work.
I spend a lot of time to send to my homework.
I wish to send my homework to you.
-HOMEWORK FOR TODAY-
This season, what should you sell to make a bundle?
I think.... a dustproof mask is best.
Because, Now Korea have many dust has came from China.
Therefore, It should be sold well in Korea.
강사 첨삭
Oh, Kirk, I felt bad after reading the first part of your letter. I must have pushed you too hard in making your homework.
Have you gotten your computer fixed?
How about your Internet connection? Did you give the customer\'s service department a call?
Perhaps, this is one of your reasons for not having a video class with us.
We actually have two types of video classes. We have the more interactive one, which is the Video Solution Class, and the very common one, which is the Skype Class.
You must be familiar with these two.
Well, Kirk, I must say that the time that you spent sending in your homework is worthwhile.
Thank you so much!
And so, Kirk, let\'s start making a bundle!
I think everyone of us is business-minded in one way or another.
I will call you then later, Kirk, and let\'s talk more of simple goods that we can sell to make a bundle this spring season.
_Klein
Hi Klein^^How are you?
>>CorrectToday, My computer had some problems.>>Correct
OR >> Today, I had some problems with my computer.The biggest problem is to do not connect to internet.>>The biggest problem is the Internet connection.
>>The biggest problem is its connection to the Internet.So, It is hard work, to upload My home work.>>Correct [observe proper spacing and use of punctuation marks]
OR >> So, it is hard work to upload my homework.I spend a lot of time to send to my homework.>>I spend a lot of time just to send my homework to you.
>>It takes a lot of time just to send you my homework.
>>Sending my homework to you eats up most of my time.I wish to send my homework to you.>>Correct-HOMEWORK FOR TODAY-This season, what should you sell to make a bundle?I think.... a dustproof mask is best.>>Correct
OR >> I think, a dustproof mask is best to make a bundle from.Because, Now Korea have many dust has came from China.>>This is because now in Korea, there\'s too much dust from China.
>>This is because now in Korea, there\'s too much duct coming from China.Therefore, It should be sold well in Korea.
>>Correct
OR >> Therefore, it [dustproof mask] may be sold well in Korea.
>> Therefore, dustproof masks may be sold well in Korea.
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