Hi there^^
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Klein.^^
I will talk to you about my story in prison of USA.
That time might be 5 years ago.
I have been the America when i was choir member name of "Ensemble".
This experience was very unique to me.
infact, This plan is not planed when the begining.
But a pastor who he go with us request for us suddenly,"Can you sing in frond of criminals?".
This request was planed suddenly, but we allowed his request.
So, we visited the prison, we sang in front of them.
In fact, this is very hard work to us, because we should have some conditions for to go inside this prison.
It requested to us what kind of personal informations.
So, we spent many times to we enter this inspection.
But, we got much good experience that we haven't felt no once until that time.
Many criminals participated our concert, all people with us sang with us to God.
Perhaps, It might be God's gift for us.^^
P.S
I'm sorry I don't have enough board for my homework.;;;;
I will write down tomrrow.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Kirk! I\'ve been waiting for this composition of yours.
Yesterday, I was really shocked when you mentioned that you went to prison when you were in the USA. I really thought you did something wrong that\'s why you were put to jail, only to find out that you went there to sing for the prisoners as part of your missionary.
I guess I was just overly excited, so I really need to let you finish what you have to say first before I react.
Come to think of it, we truly are blessed!
I\'m so blessed that I met you!
I\'ll be waiting for your next compositions, Kirk!
May you have a great afternoon!
_Klein
Hi Klein.^^>>CorrectI will talk to you about my story in prison of USA.>>I will talk to you about my story in prison in the USA.That time might be 5 years ago.>>Correct
OR >> It was about five years ago.I have been the America when i was choir member name of \"Ensemble\".>>I have been to America when I was a member of the choir \"Ensemble\".This experience was very unique to me.>>Correct!infact, This plan is not planed when the begining.>>In fact, this was not planned.
>>In fact, it started without a plan.But a pastor who he go with us request for us suddenly,\"Can you sing in frond of criminals?\".>>But a pastor who tagged along with us suddenly requested, \"Can you sing in from of the criminals/prisoners?\"
This request was planed suddenly, but we allowed his request.>>This request was granted, so we just planned for it immediately.So, we visited the prison, we sang in front of them.>>So, we visited the prisoners in that prison and sang in front of them.
>>So, we went to that prison and sang for the prisoners. In fact, this is very hard work to us, because we should have some conditions for to go inside this prison.>>In fact, this was a very hard job for us, because we went through some conditions before we were allowed to go inside the prison walls.It requested to us what kind of personal informations.>>We had to give our personal information.
>>We had to disclose our personal information.So, we spent many times to we enter this inspection.>>So, we spent much time for the inspection before we entered the premise.But, we got much good experience that we haven\'t felt no once until that time.>>But we got such a good experience that we haven\'t had until that time.
>>But we had such a good experience that we didn\'t have until then.Many criminals participated our concert, all people with us sang with us to God.>>Many criminals participated in our performance.
>>Many of the prisoners sang with us for God.
>>Many of them participated as they sang the song to God with us.Perhaps, It might be God\'s gift for us.^^>>Correct
OR >> Perhaps, it is God\'s gift.
>>It might be God\'s blessing.
>>It might be one of God\'s blessings to us.P.SI\'m sorry I don\'t have enough board for my homework.;;;;
>>Correct
OR >>I\'m sorry, I don\'t have enough space here for my homework.
>>I\'m sorry, there isn\'t enough space here on the board for my homework.I will write down tomrrow.
>>I will write it down tomorrow.
>>I will post it tomorrow.
>>I will send it to you tomorrow.
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