Hi There^^
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Hi there^^ Long time no see. Because we have not communicated during a day.^^HA~~~
How about your day today.^^
I had a day like each all day.^^
But, I was so busy because i had much more time for exercise.
So, i am tired just a little now.
Did you finshed your day today fruitful? Or be going to?^^
Anyway, i want you to finish a day today fruitful.^^
Finally. for your asking...
When i was invited at a building during traveling mission trip with my choir member,
i saw a big castle.
(I can not know it is a house or a caslte....)
It is the house of a person that is a rich.
(The man is the rich person in England in rank five.)
I remember this house.^^
So, I am going to describe that it was just huge and grand.^^
(I can not describe any more.T,T;;)
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Hello, Kirk! I am starting to miss you now. How is your day going so far?
How I hope I can make my day fruitful today, just like how you want me to do it.
How about yours, are you making it fruitful or even more fruitful than before?
You know that I always wish you the same.
With your answer below, even if you only used a few adjectives, I was able to picture it in my head.
I think I have seen one before.
Is that the kind of house that you want to have or your dream house?
It can be great if you can have something like that and you will only stay there for a vacation with your family and good friends.
How does this sound?
I may be thinking too much but this sounds nice, doesn\'t it?
So Kirk, if you are going to have this kind of castle-like house in the near future, do not forget to invite me over.
Until then Kirk! Thanks for today!
May you continue to have a great time, as always.
_Klein
Hi there^^ Long time no see. Because we have not communicated during a day.^^HA~~~>>CorrectHow about your day today.^^>>Correct [use the punctuation mark ? for questions]I had a day like each all day.^^>>I had a day like each day.
>>I had an ordinary day.But, I was so busy because i had much more time for exercise.>>Correct [capitalization for pronoun \"I\"]So, i am tired just a little now.>>So I am just a little tired now.Did you finshed your day today fruitful? Or be going to?^^>>Did you finish your day today fruitfully or you will still finish it? [DID + present tense of the verb like here FINISH]
>>Did you finish a fruitful day today or is it still ongoing?Anyway, i want you to finish a day today fruitful.^^>>Anyway, I want you to finish a day like today fruitfully.Finally. for your asking...>>Finally, as for your question_When i was invited at a building during traveling mission trip with my choir member, i saw a big castle.>>When I was invited to go to a building during my missionary trip with my choir member, I saw a big castle.(I can not know it is a house or a caslte....)>>I cannot determine if it is a house or a castle.It is the house of a person that is a rich.>>It is the house of a person that is rich. [remove A because rich is an adjective and the order does not require it](The man is the rich person in England in rank five.)>>The man is one of the richest persons in English whose rank is five.I remember this house.^^>>CorrectSo, I am going to describe that it was just huge and grand.^^>>Correct!
(I can not describe any more.T,T;;)
>>I cannot describe it anymore.
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