Hi there,

Good afternoon [이름]!

Hope this correction helps.
Thanks for today!
Take care!

Always,

Kathrine ^^

Hi there,
>>  Hi there!
I will intruduce myself. 

>>  correct! (introduce)
 I\'m [이름]oung Lee and My engliish name is Christina.

>>  correct!

It is baptismal name.

>>  It is my baptismal name.

I\'m 24 years old that international age.

>>  My international age is 24.

And I have 4 people in my family.

>>  We are 4 in the family.

My father, Mother and older brother.

>>  correct!

They always look after me.

>>  correct!

And I really happy because of them.

>>  And I am really happy because of them.

 Also,I\'ve been worked in Raonx almost 2years.

>>   I have been working in Raonx for almost 2 years.

As i introduce my company, Our company deal with software and engineering about CAE.

>>  Our company deals with engineering softwares about CAE.

Moreover, we launched the KTM(Material software) from last year.

>>  We also launched the KTM (Material Software) last year.

After that, we do business sales as hard as possible.

>>  correct!

But we didn\'t know about KTM Bisiness than yours.

>>  But we do not know about the KTM business as much as you do.

So, I want to know about that throngh this opportuiniy.

>>  So I want to know about it through this opportunity.

Furthermore, We want to make this business next year.

>>  correct!

If you have success story, Please let me know about that and teach me.

>>  If you have a success story, please let me know about it so that it would teach me.

Nice to meet you again and have a good time throgh this conference.

>>  Nice to meet you again and have a good time!

One more things that I hope we\'ll keep in touch after this conference. Thank you!

  >>  I hope that we will still keep in touch after this conference. Thank you!