Hi there^^
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When was the last time you’ve burnt a hole in your pocket?
Please relate what happened.
I experienced a situation which is burnt a hole in my pocket.
It was happened when I was in University, before going to Korean army(military force).^^
Then, I collected some money around 20 thousands of dollars.
And I listened to bad news it was a woman who is my church member could't learn to play the piano for a university entrance examination because of money.
So, Before going to military force, I gave my all asset to her.
So, I was do happy.^^
And she safely passed the entrance exam.^^
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You are such a blessing in disguise! Would you mind telling me where she is right now? I\'m referring to your churchmate whom you helped way back then. Oh, you are
really something! I can say that you\'re the best!I don\'t know what else to say because I am truly impressed. Thank you for sharing this experience of yours. well, I know that you are a good guy, but I didn\'t think
you\'re this great.I feel so light and glad. May you inspire many more souls my dear.And it\'s my turn to help you out. I rephrased some of your statements below. I hope you\'ll have the time to check them out.Don\'t hesitate to raise your questions, if you have some.I cannot wait to speak with you again.I will catch you then!Wait for me Kirk._Klein
When was the last time you’ve burnt a hole in your pocket?Please relate what happened.
I experienced a situation which is burnt a hole in my pocket.
>>I experienced a situation where I burnt a hole in my pocket.
It was happened when I was in University, before going to Korean army(military force).^^
>>It happened when I was in University, before going to Korean army or military force.
Then, I collected some money around 20 thousands of dollars.
>>CorrectOR >>Then, I collected some money around 20 thousand dollars.
And I listened to bad news it was a woman who is my church member could\'t learn to play the piano for a university entrance examination because of money.
>>And I heard some bad news where a woman in our church couldn\'t learn to play the piano for a university entrance examination because of money.
So, Before going to military force, I gave my all asset to her.
So, I was do happy.^^
>>So, before going to military, I gave all my assets to her and I was happy.>>So before rendering military service, I gave all my assets to her and it made me happy.>>So before entering military, I gave my earnings to her, which made me happy.
And she safely passed the entrance exam.^^
>>Correct!OR >>And she smoothly passed the entrance exam.
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