Hi there!

2011-04-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

It's a beautiful day. Although I woke up your call, I was pleased with today's class. I changed a lot of things of my life after reading Good luck to you. I lacked autonomy before reading that book although I became adult. But I realized that my opinion and choice is important in term of my issue. Of course, it doesn't mean that other's opinion is not important. But I was self-conscious in the past. I paid attention excessively how others think about me. So, My feeling ad thinking was changeable as weather. Anyway, I have my view of values now. I'm satisfied with myself. I'm not sad anymore for making comparison between me and others. This story is more complexed matters than what l wrote in here. Anyway, Have a great day. I'm going to write my composition one more today.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]! Thank you for your composition today! I'm glad that you are pleased with our class today because I feel the same way. Take care and have a great day! T. Kelly It's a beautiful day. >> Correct.Although I woke up your call, I was pleased with today's class. >> Although my sleep was disturbed by your call, I was pleased with our class today.I changed a lot of things of my life after reading Good luck to you. >> Many things in my life have changed after reading the book "Good Luck to You."I lacked autonomy before reading that book although I became adult. >> I wasn't independent although I'm an adult until I read that book.But I realized that my opinion and choice is important in term of my issue. >> But I realized that my opinion and choice are important.Of course, it doesn't mean that other's opinion is not important. >> Of course, it doesn't mean that the opinion of others is not important.But I was self-conscious in the past. >> Correct.I paid attention excessively how others think about me. >> I paid excessive attention to what others think about me.So, My feeling ad thinking was changeable as weather. >> So, my thoughts and emotions were unpredictable as the weather.Anyway, I have my view of values now. >> Correct.I'm satisfied with myself. >> Correct.I'm not sad anymore for making comparison between me and others. >> Correct.This story is more complexed matters than what l wrote in here. >> My story is more complicated than what I wrote here.Anyway, have a great day. >> Correct.I'm going to write my composition one more today. >> I'm going to write another composition today.

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