Hi there!
학생이 쓴 원문
It's a beautiful day.
Although I woke up your call, I was pleased with today's class.
I changed a lot of things of my life after reading Good luck to you.
I lacked autonomy before reading that book although I became adult.
But I realized that my opinion and choice is important in term of my issue.
Of course, it doesn't mean that other's opinion is not important.
But I was self-conscious in the past.
I paid attention excessively how others think about me.
So, My feeling ad thinking was changeable as weather.
Anyway, I have my view of values now.
I'm satisfied with myself.
I'm not sad anymore for making comparison between me and others.
This story is more complexed matters than what l wrote in here.
Anyway, Have a great day.
I'm going to write my composition one more today.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for your composition today! I'm glad that you are pleased with our class today because I feel the same way. Take care and have a great day!
T. Kelly
It's a beautiful day.
>> Correct.Although I woke up your call, I was pleased with today's class.
>> Although my sleep was disturbed by your call, I was pleased with our class today.I changed a lot of things of my life after reading Good luck to you.
>> Many things in my life have changed after reading the book "Good Luck to You."I lacked autonomy before reading that book although I became adult.
>> I wasn't independent although I'm an adult until I read that book.But I realized that my opinion and choice is important in term of my issue.
>> But I realized that my opinion and choice are important.Of course, it doesn't mean that other's opinion is not important.
>> Of course, it doesn't mean that the opinion of others is not important.But I was self-conscious in the past.
>> Correct.I paid attention excessively how others think about me.
>> I paid excessive attention to what others think about me.So, My feeling ad thinking was changeable as weather.
>> So, my thoughts and emotions were unpredictable as the weather.Anyway, I have my view of values now.
>> Correct.I'm satisfied with myself.
>> Correct.I'm not sad anymore for making comparison between me and others.
>> Correct.This story is more complexed matters than what l wrote in here.
>> My story is more complicated than what I wrote here.Anyway, have a great day.
>> Correct.I'm going to write my composition one more today.
>> I'm going to write another composition today.
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