Hi there Verna
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I'd like to write a composition about today's topic world's population problem.
I know that's a big problem in the world.
But most of people doesn't worry the world's problem and future's problem, especially a developing country's people.
Because they don't have enough time to think that problem.
The most important thing to them is to be more richer and more wealthy, and a few people will just think what to eat today.
So they doesn't mention about future's thing not to happen, the most big thing to them is a real problem.
So I think, to solve the world's population problem, we have to try to solve the real problem of developing countries together.
The people in the earth do the best to worry both future's problem and today's problem at the same time.
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Hi!
You did a good job in writing this composition! You were able to share your
views about this topic pretty well. Have a great evening!
T. Verna
I'd like to write a composition about today's topic world's population problem.
>> I'd like to write a composition about today's topic which is the world's population problem. I know that's a big problem in the world.
>>CorrectBut most of people doesn't worry the world's problem and future's problem, especially a developing country's people. Because they don't have enough time to think that problem.
>> But most people don't worry about the world's problem and the future's problem, especially a developing country's people because they don't have enough time to think about that problem.The most important thing to them is to be more richer and more wealthy, and a few people will just think what to eat today.
>> The most important thing to them is to be more rich and more wealthy, and a few people will just think what to eat today.So they doesn't mention about future's thing not to happen, the most big thing to them is a real problem. >> So they don't mention about things to avoid in the future. The biggest thing to them is a real problem.So I think, to solve the world's population problem, we have to try to solve the real problem of developing countries together.
>>CorrectThe people in the earth do the best to worry both future's problem and today's problem at the same time.
>> The people of the earth do their best to worry about both future's problem and today's problem at the same time.
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