Hi-Verna!

2012-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Ling time no see, ma teacher! Let me check composition such as answer for question. 1:I would like to go to Istanbul in turkey. I heard some information about that country from my friend. He said to me there are have a lot of attraction, beautiful sights, many remains, traditional shops. Honestly I lived Syria near turkey, but I haven’t any chance. So If I have a chance to go any country. I will go there.2.I worked in service field for about 1year 2month. At first I didn’t know how to deal with customer and sometimes I made mistakes. Through senior, I’m steadily accustomed to how to do service. I think that the most important-thing is bright smile& good attitude. Because our attitude would affect customer’s feeling. It was great opportunity to me and taught me that customers always come first anticipating my customers needs before they have to ask always makes a great impression on them.Making a great first impression is key to creating life-long& regularly customers.

강사 첨삭

Hi there! I am glad to see your composition. Thank you for doing them.I may say that you got a beautiful thought about things. It is really nice to know that you learned something from your job. ^^ Not all people can learn from their everyday activities. ^^ By the way, I also heard that Istanbul is a good place to visit. ^^ Good night.

T.Verna

Ling time no see, ma teacher!

>>Long time no see my teacher!

Let me check composition such as answer for question.

>>Let me check the composition and answer the questions.

1:I would like to go to Istanbul in Turkey.

>>1. CORRECT

I heard some information about that country from my friend.

>>CORRECT

He said to me there are have a lot of attraction, beautiful sights, many remains, traditional shops.

>>He said that there are a lot of attractions, beautiful sights, many remains, and traditional shops.  

Honestly I lived Syria near turkey, but I haven’t any chance.

>>Honestly, I lived in Syria that is near to Turkey but I haven\'t got any chance.

So If I have a chance to go any country. I will go there.

>>So if I have a chance to go there, I will go there.

2.I worked in service field for about 1year 2month.

>>2. I worked in a service field for a year and 2 months.

At first I didn’t know how to deal with customer and sometimes I made mistakes.

>>At first, I didn\'t know how to deal with the customers and sometimes made mistakes.

Through senior, I’m steadily accustomed to how to do service.

>>With the help of my senior, I was accustomed to how the service works.

 I think that the most important thing is bright smile& good attitude.

>> I think that the most important things are bright smile & good attitude.

Because our attitude would affect customer\'s feeling.

>>CORRECT

It was great opportunity to me and taught me that customers always come first anticipating my customers needs before they have to ask always makes a great impression on them.

>>It was a great opportunity to me and it taught me to anticipate the customers needs before they tell you. It always makes a great impression on them.

Making a great first impression is key to creating life long & regularly customers.

>>Making a great first impression is the key to create a life long & regular customers.

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