Hi Verna.
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Secondly, Contact the company you want to work directly.
>>Second, contact the company you want to work directly.
This way is quite impressive.
>>Correct
So If I have a company that I really wnat to work, I'll do that.
>>So If there's a company that I really want to work, I'll do that.
I introduced two way to find a new job.
>> I introduced two ways to find a new job.
Individually I recommend first way, because I've already joined with a saramin(recruitment website) I was contaced the company to interview.
>>Personally, I recommend the first way because I already joined a saramin (recruitment website) The company contacted me for an interview.
So If you want to get a new job quickly, you seem to join with a recruitment website.
>> So if you want to get a new job quickly, you might consider joining a recruitment website.
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The soldiers are in the middle of picture.
>> Correct
I think they have a parade for celebrating something.
>> I thing there is a parade and they are celebrating something.
Thier appearance are quite tension before a parade.
>>They look like they are under tension.
There are many people behind soldiers.
>>Correct
They seem to exciting to see a parade.
>> They seem to be excited to see the parade.
Thanks Verna! ^^^^
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