High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study
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I disagree with this opinion.
First of all, they are too young to choose the knowledge that we need to live. Everybody wants to study what is fun and interesting. But it is not equal to what we should learnt. If they gave an options to pick their favorite subjects, they would not fill with
Second, based on my experience, there are no useless things I learend at highschool.
Actually, I couldn't understand why I should learn these subject such as biology, mathmatics, chemistry and etc. As time goes by, however, I natually know this reason. When I watch news program or read, there are usually articles related to above subjects. If I didn't know anything about them, I would not understand and become interested. So I think it is due to my highschool education designed to teach us.
For these reasons, I definitely disagree that students.
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Hello there [이름]! ^^
Thank you so much for expressing your views about the topic at had. In writing essays, it is a good idea to mention the topic being discussed in the first sentence so that people, who are reading your essay, would understand what you are talking about. ^^ Now, most of your sentences are, probably, at 90% accuracy but there are still some coherence errors.
See you in class. ^^
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
I disagree with this opinion.
>> I disagree of high schools allowing students to study the courses that they want to study.
First of all, they are too young to choose the knowledge that we need to live. Everybody wants to study what is fun and interesting. But it is not equal to what we should learnt.
>> First of all, students are too young to choose what knowledge is essential or not. Everybody wants to learn what is fun and interesting but that does not mean that it is always beneficial.
If they gave an options to pick their favorite subjects, they would not fill with >> If schools gave options to choose subjects then the students education will be lacking.
Second, based on my experience, there are no useless things I learend at highschool.
>> Second, based on my experience, there isn\'t anything useless in highschool subjects.
Actually, I couldn\'t understand why I should learn these subject such as biology, mathmatics, chemistry and etc.
>> Before, I couldn\'t understand why I should learn various subjects like Biology, Mathematics, Chemistry to mention a few.
As time goes by, however, I natually know this reason.
>> However, as time passed, I came to understand why.
When I watch news program or read, there are usually articles related to above subjects.
>> When I watch news programs or read, there are usually articles related to the above subjects.
If I didn\'t know anything about them, I would not understand and become interested.
>> If I wasn\'t familiar with those subjects, I would not understand and become uninterested.
So I think it is due to my highschool education designed to teach us.
>> Therefore, I think that high school education is designed to teach and inform us.
For these reasons, I definitely disagree that students. >> With the reasons I mentions, I definitely disagree with students being able to choose which courses to study.
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